(I personally agree)
Most private schools force students to
wear school uniforms, because they give students sense of belonging to the
school. However, School uniforms are useless and outdated tradition.
21st century is characterized by freedom and individuality. However,
by making students wear unified clothes, schools ignore the individuality of
students. Students not only express themselves through their words and
behaviors but also by what they wear to school.
The typical groups that require their members to wear school uniform
include military, and bureaucracy. All of which are cold, hierarchical, and
authoritarian groups. Schools unintentionally create authoritarian atmosphere
just by adopting school uniforms.
Forcing
students to wear school uniforms is more than just ruining of the fashion. Students
shouldn’t be forced to wear what they don’t want to wear, and should have the
right to wear what they want to. School uniform clearly restricts the freedom
of students
In these limited mini writings you have to pay extra attention to grammatical oversights etc., and they should be almost perfect. Example: THE 21st century... and you are missing a period in the last sentence. Mostly strong writing, but do be more careful if this were submitted to a college.
답글삭제In terms of structure, as outlined in class, the attention you give to your real view should be evident enough. Perhaps as much as 50/50, with a closing paragraph. Only one argument is needed against your real view. First paragraph is the one that needs more without the last sentence.
Good issue though. Personal and universal.